The girl who never believed short story

Rocky  was a 10 year old girl she lived with her two sisters and two brothers Delia who is 12, raspberry who is 5 , Luke who is 13 and Jack who is 18 . They lived in a Mansion in Mako Los angels . Rocky nerved   believed  in fairy tales one day while she was singing in public someone pulled her arm she was screaming this was in peter pan Wendy . She was scared and she did not know what to do was this the end .  She felt sad for not believing then she saw a face it was her mum pulling her . She was so  angry and worried about her she was grounded for a  month then her sister came in with a angry bee hive . Rocky was allergic to bee stings . Find out what happens next . 

The end 

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Story

Once  apon a time there is a cheeky boy called Jason.He is about 16 years old  he diled his hair brown. Furthermore  lived on ockley road number 70. Infect he really doesn’t behave and also doesn’t like school. He is a really mean bully he doesn’t even care if he gets in trouble. His favuarite thing is to bully people. Also he is 16 and lots of people are scared of him in his school. There called Mr and Ms Patel.

His parents  are really rich I bet they could even offered there own town. His parents are all million  ares. So everyone in his family likes it at there home. He sniffed twice he smelt pizza he said I hope they ate ordering the pizza that cost 1 million and is 67 cm long. His  room is also about 67m long.

Jason  and his rich family  were going to the  attic. Suddenly  they found this mysterious  machine  lots of dirty dust was open it. It also had aloud of colours on the machine. I went inside I was really quisitive  of what this machine could do or what it is. Next when I went in  is saw this huge red button. I  quietly  pressed the red button and I said oops I ended op I a desert . “I shouted!”  Nooooo.

I called my parent they said I’ll get a plain and I’ll rescue you then they flew to the desert and rescued Jason  they used about a plain.

But the lain crashed and they ended up in a hospital. There hole family opens there eyes in the same time they  never knew were they were.”He  shaid shall I stop being  a bully?”

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100 word challenge

Once there was a hero called super man and he saw people in danger and helped them when they are in trouble.Then they saw a spot growing in the middle and was destroying things , they tried to stop it but the spot just grew and grew.It got really big and huge then people realized if it got the biggest it would create a black hole and destroy reality and earth will disappear.They tried there best and finally stopped the hole and had a exciting to live in . After a while they had a super great party with everyone in town.

Can you try and do a 100 word challenge about but the spot just grew and grew?  


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An eventful journey

In a flat in England, a boy called Jake and he has a friend called Jacob. They are both ten years old and they like football. Jake is very good at football. Jake and Jacob are very sensible, although he is sometimes rude. At some point he is nice and at some points he is rude. They live in a tall flat, with no dirt or anything on the wall. They live in the top floor and it is very high. Jake looks like a person you can rely on. If he doesn’t like eating juicy fruits he eats pizza.

At the hygienic flat, it is very noisy because below there  are people shouting so loud people outside the flat may hear the noise. They make us deaf by the loud noise from below. Coming from down below, Jake could smell food drifting into his nose and he feels very scared as he is on his own, very lonely, in a flat. I think that the person creating the ear deafening is a baby bursting into tears.

I was bored sitting on my comfy sofa, I decided to go on a eventful journey which should  fun and make us active. If it isn’t fun this journey will be a whole lot of uselessness. They moved to a massive park full of playing things like a swirly slide, swings and many others. In the distance there was a frozen pond. They said ” that it has to be fun” so they went ice-skating on a thin layer of ice. Suddenly, feeling disappointed, Jake fell in the frozen pond and had no way out but just to call the ambulance to save our life. In Jake’s mind, he said ” I don’t want to die.”

He fell in suddenly because of the weight of him, made the ice break and he fell in the  icy pond. Immediately, they called the ambulance and they said” it will take four hours to get there on feet,” because of the weather conditions. It was very snowy and blobs of snow like ice cream splatted on the floor. The paramedic’s are  very tired and their legs are aching. The paramedics  leg might fall of  because of all the tiring walking.

In four hours they arrived at the colossal park and were pulling Jake out of the frigid pond to save his life. Without wasting any time, they got brave Jake out of the bitter pond and placed the coat on Jake to warm himself up. Jake got home feeling cold and drank hot tea to cool him down.

Wondering in the massive city he can not find his way back home. One hour later, he still does not know his way and he will be living nowhere but in the middle of a busy city. They will be sleeping on the dirty floor. Jake was really sad and lonely and luckily, he found his way home feeling happy.

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Grace and the golden dragon

Once upon a time in a castle far far away there lived a family a Royal family. The Queen and King had one child called Grace she was the princess of the castle. One stormy night the King sent grace to find a cottage in the middle of the deep dark woods to bring back a potion from the witch to make the kingdom to life again. Grace set of with her cape and basket she went to the horse stable to ride her faviroute horse snowy she was as shiny as the sun and as white as snow. Grace muppets on the saddle and of she went in to the deep dark woods. It started to rain and Grace had still not fount the cottage she was so tiered and needed a place to rest so she decided to go back but she didn’t remember the way back. But in the corner of her every she saw light flashing and she heard music. She  turned her head and saw a massive gate. As she went towards it the music went louder she got of snowy and pushed the gate open with all her strength. She walked across the village as everyone was watching her she came to a gate she went to ring the doorbell but the door had automatically opened she saw nothing just darkness. Suddenly something grabbed her and carried her away she banged her head and fainted. She woke up in the middle of a deep dark room then a light flashed on her and a loud voice spoke “I am King Sadrees” Grace stood their frozen. But she opened her mouth and said “your not King. My father is king”  Sadrees replied ” you are the princess and your father is the king but by the end of tomorrow that crown will be on my head and you and your family will be in this room fighting my pet. Sadrees picked up a bag from the floor and pulled out three potions he said ” I heard you where looking for the witches cottage ” Grace shouted ” tell me where it is I need to find the potion to bring back summer ” Sadrees said “one of the potions that I am holding will bring back summer chose wisely ” Grace wondered why her dad gave he the basket so she looked in it and saw a potion Grace wasn’t listing to Sadrees she was to busy wondering what the potion was for Sadrees got so angered and threw one of the potions on the floor. Grace was covered in smoke and there was fire all around each he Grace dropped the basket the potion fell out and broke pink smoke covered the air. Standing in front of Grace was a Dragon but not any old dragon a golden dragon it picked Grace up on its back and flew in to the sky. Grace looked back at the village and saw snowy she tried to get the golden dragons attention but she flew so fast that the wind nearly blew Grace of and the golden dragon wasn’t paying attention anyway. Grace heard a voice she was surprised to see it was the golden dragon it said “I can get summer back I can get you home I can get snowy back and most important of all I can protect you and your family ”  Grace was filled with happiness and joy. A few hours went by and Grace fell asleep they finally reached home and the golden dragon lifted Grace up and put his tale through the window and put Grace in her bed and gave her blanket. Morning came Grace was shocked to notice she was in her bed she looked out her window and the sun was out Grace was exited to tell her family her adventure. The end

By Mariam

 


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The sorcerer

One sunny day there was a boy call Jerry,he’s mother died in a car crash and he’s father was died in a war,he is 32 years old. He goes to a job and his job is a engineer to own money.Once when he was doing his job he heard a weird sound ,seems that it was still going in he followed a sound and when he reached it he relize that it was just a bird but leaded him into a abounded chord there were sounds like oooooooooh and the church was full of bugs,trash and skeleton. In front of him there was a lever he wanted to pull it but it was full of bugs and spider and Jerry ost fier are bugs and spider and when he touched the spider it vanished and he touched the bug it vanished as well so began to touch every bug and spider and the lever was clear when he touched the lever it suddenly it got pulled down and he heard big BANG !!! He quietly turned around slowly and he was relief becuse a door open behind him.He went near the door and when he went near it particul surrounded him he panicked and quick as flash he got teleported into a cave.Also there was a path so he followed it and it lend him into a parkour the floor is lava ,he made the parkour. After he finished the parkour he sawed a wand when he touched it suddenly he thinks of a story with a sorcerer with the wand which is the wand right in front of him he thinks that the sorcerer is trapped inside his wand he holded the wand with his two hand and in a blink of a eye a sorcerer appeared and Jerry said question and they became friends and lived happily ever after.

what do you think of my story? How can I improve it?


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A4 paper challenge ?

What did I do?

Firstly we had to get a ruler and a A4 piece of paper and cut  it so it was a shape of a bumpy road. Before we cut it we folded the piece of paper.  Then we untapped the paper which made a big hole. Then we all fit in the hole and the challenge was done.

how many people could you fit in yours?


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100 word challenge

“But the spot just grew and grew,” shouted Tom in shock. He did not want to go to school as he was embarrassed. His mum said to him “There is nothing to be worried about,” she said while patting  his head. As a couple of days went by his spot grew and grew and his argue to go to school got less and less. He has been seeing a doctor and getting medicine ever day but nothing was helping him and he has not went to school for more than   1 year  now. he was getting night mares when he sleeps

How do you think I can improve this work?


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100 word challenge

My name is Jimmy  and we are planting beans in our garden . Ten days later the beanstalk was still so tiny . In the plant spot just grew and grew . In the morning as I opened the door . There was a beanstalk . I could not even see it because it was so big . I tried looking for the cover and it said that it will grow . I went the shop and I saw a sign saying it will grow big . We called a person to cut down the tree and it never ever grew again . We were really happy . The End .

Can you write a 100 word challenge ?


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100 Word challenge

 

A room full of spots was covering the walls. It was a school trip but we were lost so we ended up in a little room full of spots. We were talking as a class but the spot just grew and grew covering all the space of the room. It was falling of making a noise as it hits to the ground. Everyone gasped as they heard the clinky noise. Everyone was panicking until they were cooling down finding out that it wasn’t a big thing. After the teacher found a way everyone was happy and excited. They had freedom.

How can I up level this?


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